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主持人一点通:一读文章的开头,我们就知道祁蒙同学对花草植物一定不陌生,因为他家简直是花的世界。他只是稍稍一罗列,就能说出一连串花草的名字。所以,他能轻而易举地选择夜来香,一种不太为人熟悉的花来写。一般的花朵,只是在光合作用下放出香气,引来蜜蜂、蝴蝶和其他昆虫进行传粉授精。偏偏夜来香是在晚上8点左右开花飘香的,这就很特殊。祁蒙同学观察仔细,用词也很专业,比如:“花梃”、“主茎”、“枝杈”等,对夜来香花朵的描写也很优美、形象、人格化……夜来香在夏夜开放,人们乘凉时,闻着香气确实感到舒服。不知夜来香的香味是否真的能驱赶蚊虫,如果真是这样,那就更妙了。所以,夜来香值得人们去爱。作文的结尾嫌多余,太公式化了,能换一种写法吗?或者就省略掉。看,选择一种不常见的植物,文章就有趣多了。
Host a little pass: the first reading article at the beginning, we know that students must not farewell to plants and flowers, because his home is simply a flower world. He just listed a little, you can say a series of flowers name. So, he can easily choose the night to Xiang, a less familiar flower to write. Ordinary flowers, just under the photosynthesis release aroma, attracted bees, butterflies and other insects pollination insemination. It is very special that evening primrose is fragrant at around 8pm. The students of Qimen careful observation, the words are also very professional, such as: “Scape”, “main stem”, “twig”, the description of nocturnal flower is also very beautiful, image, personalization ... When people enjoy the cool weather, they feel comfortable. I do not know whether the scent of nocturnal can really repel mosquitoes, if so, it is even better. Therefore, the evening incense worthy of people to love. Too much writing at the end of the composition, too formulaic, can change a wording? Or omitted. Look, choose an unusual plant, the article is more interesting.