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汉语式写作、憋不出一个高级词汇、只会用and简单句……这些书面表达中的常见问题是考生失分的症结。笔者以丰富的教学经验和高考阅卷经验告诉你，只要掌握一定的词汇和句式，按照正确的写作流程，抓住写作要点，书面表达也有速成之法。
书面表达速成流程
Step：审题——要点不能漏
考生在下笔之前一定要明确这几个问题：题目要求是什么？是否要写标题？文章是什么体裁？有哪些要点？文章的结构如何，应分几段？用什么人称和时态？有无特殊要求？（重要的信息，最好用笔勾出来，以免出错）
《求学》提醒：为什么审题如此重要？因为只有明确了写作要点才不会写偏。书面表达一定要包括所有要点，一旦遗漏要点，就容易失分。人称、时态、语态、动词错误是大错，单词拼写、大小写、标点符号、介词、冠词等是小错，三个小错等于一个大错。全文有五个或五个以上大错，文章就会不及格。
Step：成文——遣词造句，打磨句式
1. 拒绝贫乏的表达和低级词汇
贫乏的表达往往会使文章看起来呆板，没有灵气，而运用高级、亮点词汇能让文章出彩，能给阅卷老师留下深刻的印象。
例1
① A good relationship between teachers and students is good for our study. （is beneficial to）
② It’s very important to protect our environment. （of great importance/significance）
③ I think only in this way can we get on well with our teachers. （I am firmly convinced; are on good terms with）
例2
以下几个句子在表达“非常”这个意思时，就使用了不同的词语：
① During the night， it got terribly cold.
② I’m extremely sorry for the delay.
③ It was a fairly good meal， and everyone enjoyed it.
《求学》提醒：考生必须清楚词语的生动性是建立在准确性的基础之上的，不能单纯为了追求生动性，而选用一些浮华的词汇，也不能选用晦涩难懂的词汇。在表达多样性的前提下，写出的文章力求通顺、流畅、自然。
2.从简单句蜕变到高级亮点句
（1）非谓语动词结构在写作中的运用
非谓语动词结构运用于写作中，能使句意简洁明快。在高考阅卷时，阅卷老师很喜欢看见有非谓语动词结构的表达，特别是看见独立主格结构时，会眼前一亮，考生的分数当然就上去了。
例3
① They returned from their journey. They felt very tired but they were happy.
→They returned from their journey， feeling very tired and happy.
② She hurried to the station， and found that the bus had left.
→She hurried to the station， only to find the bus had left.
③ There was no bus at that time， so we had to walk home.
→There being no bus at that time， we had to walk home.
（2）复合句（定从/状从/名从）在写作中的运用
复合句的使用不仅能使句子结构清晰，层次分明，上下文更加流畅，同时也能充分展示考生运用较复杂语法结构的能力。
例4
① Protecting our environment is very important.
→I’m firmly convinced that protecting our environment is very important.（宾从）
→There is no doubt that protecting our environment is very important. （同从）
→It’s obvious that protecting our environment is very important. （主从）
② You study hard and you can succeed.
→Your efforts can pay off on condition that you persist in studying hard. （ 条件状从）
（3）适当运用被动句
考生潜意识里习惯使用主动语态，适当使用一两个被动形式，能消除阅卷老师的视觉疲劳，带来新鲜感。
例5
① We can borrow five books at most and we can keep them for ten days.
→At most five books can be borrowed at a time and they can be kept for ten days. ② Our school will hold an English speech contest on Sunday afternoon.
→An English speech contest will be held on Sunday afternoon.
升格写作指导
【试题演练】假如你是李华，你校英文报“外国文化”栏目拟刊登介绍美国节日风俗和中学生生活的短文。请给美国朋友彼得写信约稿，要点如下：
1.栏目介绍;2.稿件内容;3.稿件长度：约400词;4.交稿日期：6月28日前。
注意：词数100左右;可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯;开头语已为你写好。
【低分样本】
Dear Peter，
I’d like to ask you to write an article for our school’s English newspaper.
I have something need your help. Students in our school all welcome The “Foreign Cultures” section in our newspaper. It is mainly articles which written by foreigners. Would you write something about the culture of the United States？ We would welcome articles about American students’ school life and festivals， they must be very interesting. We all like to see those articles. In the article， you must write at least 400 words and the date of handing in your article will be June 28.
I’m looking forward to your reply.
Yours，
Li Hua
【点评】这篇文章基本上把写作要点都表达了出来，但不会得高分。首先，文章中没有使用一些较高级的地道的词汇，比如说表达“欢迎”之意时，用的是welcome，而在这里最好的表达应该是be popular with/among;其次，这是一封约稿信，所以文章中的语气应该委婉些，不要出现诸如you must write at least 400 words这样的句子;最后，文章的衔接比较差，基本没有衔接词，都是一个个单独的句子，这样文章显得很松散。
【升格佳作】
Dear Peter，
I’d like to ask you to write an article for our school’s English newspaper.
The “Foreign Cultures” section in our newspaper is very popular among us students because it carries articles written by foreign friends about the cultures of their home countries. Would you please write something about the culture in your part of the United States？ Besides， we would especially welcome articles about how Americans spend their holidays and festivals， and the life of American high school students. Hopefully， you can write anything relevant so long as it’s interesting and informative， 400 words would be fine. Could we have your article before June 28？
I’m looking forward to hearing from you！
Yours，
Li Hua
【点评】升格后的文章结构非常清晰，语言简洁、地道。文章运用了一些较高级的词汇、短语，如is popular among， relevant， so long as， informative等。此外，文章在句式的丰富多变方面下了不少功夫，有被动句、表达邀请的句子would you please...，以及宾语从句和定语从句。文章的衔接也做得很好，用一些衔接成分巧妙地把句子连接成一个整体，如besides， hopefully， and等。在注重遣词造句的同时，作者也十分注意文章的体裁。因为这是一封约稿信，所以行文中注意使用一些委婉的句式来表达邀请，如would you please...， could we...。总之，这是一篇从结构、内容到表达，都可以称之为典范的文章。
书面表达速成流程
Step：审题——要点不能漏
考生在下笔之前一定要明确这几个问题：题目要求是什么？是否要写标题？文章是什么体裁？有哪些要点？文章的结构如何，应分几段？用什么人称和时态？有无特殊要求？（重要的信息，最好用笔勾出来，以免出错）
《求学》提醒：为什么审题如此重要？因为只有明确了写作要点才不会写偏。书面表达一定要包括所有要点，一旦遗漏要点，就容易失分。人称、时态、语态、动词错误是大错，单词拼写、大小写、标点符号、介词、冠词等是小错，三个小错等于一个大错。全文有五个或五个以上大错，文章就会不及格。
Step：成文——遣词造句，打磨句式
1. 拒绝贫乏的表达和低级词汇
贫乏的表达往往会使文章看起来呆板，没有灵气，而运用高级、亮点词汇能让文章出彩，能给阅卷老师留下深刻的印象。
例1
① A good relationship between teachers and students is good for our study. （is beneficial to）
② It’s very important to protect our environment. （of great importance/significance）
③ I think only in this way can we get on well with our teachers. （I am firmly convinced; are on good terms with）
例2
以下几个句子在表达“非常”这个意思时，就使用了不同的词语：
① During the night， it got terribly cold.
② I’m extremely sorry for the delay.
③ It was a fairly good meal， and everyone enjoyed it.
《求学》提醒：考生必须清楚词语的生动性是建立在准确性的基础之上的，不能单纯为了追求生动性，而选用一些浮华的词汇，也不能选用晦涩难懂的词汇。在表达多样性的前提下，写出的文章力求通顺、流畅、自然。
2.从简单句蜕变到高级亮点句
（1）非谓语动词结构在写作中的运用
非谓语动词结构运用于写作中，能使句意简洁明快。在高考阅卷时，阅卷老师很喜欢看见有非谓语动词结构的表达，特别是看见独立主格结构时，会眼前一亮，考生的分数当然就上去了。
例3
① They returned from their journey. They felt very tired but they were happy.
→They returned from their journey， feeling very tired and happy.
② She hurried to the station， and found that the bus had left.
→She hurried to the station， only to find the bus had left.
③ There was no bus at that time， so we had to walk home.
→There being no bus at that time， we had to walk home.
（2）复合句（定从/状从/名从）在写作中的运用
复合句的使用不仅能使句子结构清晰，层次分明，上下文更加流畅，同时也能充分展示考生运用较复杂语法结构的能力。
例4
① Protecting our environment is very important.
→I’m firmly convinced that protecting our environment is very important.（宾从）
→There is no doubt that protecting our environment is very important. （同从）
→It’s obvious that protecting our environment is very important. （主从）
② You study hard and you can succeed.
→Your efforts can pay off on condition that you persist in studying hard. （ 条件状从）
（3）适当运用被动句
考生潜意识里习惯使用主动语态，适当使用一两个被动形式，能消除阅卷老师的视觉疲劳，带来新鲜感。
例5
① We can borrow five books at most and we can keep them for ten days.
→At most five books can be borrowed at a time and they can be kept for ten days. ② Our school will hold an English speech contest on Sunday afternoon.
→An English speech contest will be held on Sunday afternoon.
升格写作指导
【试题演练】假如你是李华，你校英文报“外国文化”栏目拟刊登介绍美国节日风俗和中学生生活的短文。请给美国朋友彼得写信约稿，要点如下：
1.栏目介绍;2.稿件内容;3.稿件长度：约400词;4.交稿日期：6月28日前。
注意：词数100左右;可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯;开头语已为你写好。
【低分样本】
Dear Peter，
I’d like to ask you to write an article for our school’s English newspaper.
I have something need your help. Students in our school all welcome The “Foreign Cultures” section in our newspaper. It is mainly articles which written by foreigners. Would you write something about the culture of the United States？ We would welcome articles about American students’ school life and festivals， they must be very interesting. We all like to see those articles. In the article， you must write at least 400 words and the date of handing in your article will be June 28.
I’m looking forward to your reply.
Yours，
Li Hua
【点评】这篇文章基本上把写作要点都表达了出来，但不会得高分。首先，文章中没有使用一些较高级的地道的词汇，比如说表达“欢迎”之意时，用的是welcome，而在这里最好的表达应该是be popular with/among;其次，这是一封约稿信，所以文章中的语气应该委婉些，不要出现诸如you must write at least 400 words这样的句子;最后，文章的衔接比较差，基本没有衔接词，都是一个个单独的句子，这样文章显得很松散。
【升格佳作】
Dear Peter，
I’d like to ask you to write an article for our school’s English newspaper.
The “Foreign Cultures” section in our newspaper is very popular among us students because it carries articles written by foreign friends about the cultures of their home countries. Would you please write something about the culture in your part of the United States？ Besides， we would especially welcome articles about how Americans spend their holidays and festivals， and the life of American high school students. Hopefully， you can write anything relevant so long as it’s interesting and informative， 400 words would be fine. Could we have your article before June 28？
I’m looking forward to hearing from you！
Yours，
Li Hua
【点评】升格后的文章结构非常清晰，语言简洁、地道。文章运用了一些较高级的词汇、短语，如is popular among， relevant， so long as， informative等。此外，文章在句式的丰富多变方面下了不少功夫，有被动句、表达邀请的句子would you please...，以及宾语从句和定语从句。文章的衔接也做得很好，用一些衔接成分巧妙地把句子连接成一个整体，如besides， hopefully， and等。在注重遣词造句的同时，作者也十分注意文章的体裁。因为这是一封约稿信，所以行文中注意使用一些委婉的句式来表达邀请，如would you please...， could we...。总之，这是一篇从结构、内容到表达，都可以称之为典范的文章。