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摘 要:要较好地表述个人的观点,必须注意文章的主题,增添合理的内容,给人以见一叶而知秋的感觉。
关键词:书面表达;阐述;个人观点
中国分类号:G424 文献标识码:A文章编号:1992-7711(2010)4-082 -01
一、陈述清楚,有理有节
许多学生在陈述自己的观点时,喜欢根据原先的内容加以重复,而不是自己发自己内心的真情吐露,因而给人以凌乱的感觉。
I learn English, know much about foreign cultures and it helps me to talk with foreign people. So I like English more than before. But sometimes I am sad because I forget the words I have just learned. Can you give me some advice ?
整个段落虽无明显的语法错误,但读上去给人平淡无奇的感觉,也缺乏层次感,仿佛是话语的罗列而不是情感的流露。
As far as I am concerned, learning English not only increase my awareness of foreign cultures but also help me to communicate with English-speaking people and to make new friends. However, sometimes I get discouraged because I keep forgetting words I have just learned. Could you give me some practical advice ?
该段落层次清楚,用not only…but also巧妙连接,显得有理有节;用词精辟,在段落中使用了几个“高级”词汇,如:increase my awareness,get discouraged,practical advice;结构合理,起承转合自如,两个过渡性词语As far as I am concerned,However恰倒好处地衔接了整个段落,充分体现了运用语言娴熟的技巧。
二、详略得当,情真意切
在表达个人观点时,有的学生不知何时应详细叙述,何时应简明扼要;采用何种形式来表达个人的情感。
Through this action, we find we are more interested in English and our speaking English is better than before. It’s really a good way to learn English. I like it very much. And all the students and all the teachers are very happy. Only then did we realize the practice is so important in English learning.
整个段落读上去较为完善,但似乎无精彩之处,个人感触稍为平淡。试比较下面经过该写的段落。
As everyone knows, practice makes perfect. As a result of this activity, we become more interested in English and our speaking ability has greatly improved. I think it’s an effective way to learn English so I enjoy it very much and I hope we can have another English Week next semester.
该段落无论在结构方面或情感方面都略胜一筹。首先用谚语开头,引人入胜。接着用greatly,和effective以及enjoy等词肯定了活动的积极作用。
三、阐明深刻、言之有物
一些学生在阐述自己的观点时往往不注意论述的层次性,所叙内容肤浅,往往给人以概括不全的感觉。如:
In my opinion, I will do more reading, taking some exercise and taking part in some activities in the summer vacation. I think, it will help me a lot.
该段落仅仅叙述了作者在暑假欲做的事和参加的活动。其具体内容较为笼统,结尾仓促,给人言之无物之感。
As for me, I’ve never spent a more meaningful summer vacation. In this vacation every day I will spend hours going over my lessons. I will arrange some time to relax and enjoy hobbies. I will go swimming, watching some programs on TV, doing more reading and chatting with my close friends. In addition, I will participate in community work and this will raise my awareness of public service. In short, I will benefit a lot from them this vacation.
在该段落中作者将个人的暑假活动安排得井井有然。从学习到娱乐,再到参加社会活动,并将个人感受付于言中,给人以言之有理、阐述深刻之感。另外两个过渡性词语In addition和In short对整个段落也作了良好的衔接,与主题内容一脉相承。
四、评价中肯,表达委婉,
有些文章的结尾之出常常涉及到根据某个具体的事例提出一些建议或指点。许多学生常常喜欢使用You should …,We must… 这样的结构加以阐述。殊不知频繁地使用这样的形式会给人以厌倦的感觉,如果在写作时使用其他的形式加以表达,也许会使语气变得稍微委婉,使人更易于接受。
Personally, we shouldn’t pay more attention to it because high marks don’t mean high competence. Only by working harder and can they make greater progress in the future.
该段落主要是针对如何关注高考状元这一话题而有感而发。作者在论述个人观点时话语较为生硬,尽管无语法错误,但读后使人难以接受。
In my opinion, it is all right to give a certain amount of attention, but not too much. After all, exam scores are not symbol of success in modern society. Only buy working hard and making great efforts can a person achieve his dream in the future.
该段落所表达的内容上面的段落相比较,无论在遣词造句或表达手法上都胜出一筹。用give a certain amount of attention, 这一模糊表现法体现了委婉语使用的手法,用but not too much.降格陈述使语气又大为婉转,加之After all过渡性词语的使用,更是柳暗花明又一村,将其委婉之情的表达和盘托出,显示了高超的技巧。另外文中的symbol of success,making great efforts,achieve his dream几个短语的使用将个人的中肯评价体现在字里行间。
关键词:书面表达;阐述;个人观点
中国分类号:G424 文献标识码:A文章编号:1992-7711(2010)4-082 -01
一、陈述清楚,有理有节
许多学生在陈述自己的观点时,喜欢根据原先的内容加以重复,而不是自己发自己内心的真情吐露,因而给人以凌乱的感觉。
I learn English, know much about foreign cultures and it helps me to talk with foreign people. So I like English more than before. But sometimes I am sad because I forget the words I have just learned. Can you give me some advice ?
整个段落虽无明显的语法错误,但读上去给人平淡无奇的感觉,也缺乏层次感,仿佛是话语的罗列而不是情感的流露。
As far as I am concerned, learning English not only increase my awareness of foreign cultures but also help me to communicate with English-speaking people and to make new friends. However, sometimes I get discouraged because I keep forgetting words I have just learned. Could you give me some practical advice ?
该段落层次清楚,用not only…but also巧妙连接,显得有理有节;用词精辟,在段落中使用了几个“高级”词汇,如:increase my awareness,get discouraged,practical advice;结构合理,起承转合自如,两个过渡性词语As far as I am concerned,However恰倒好处地衔接了整个段落,充分体现了运用语言娴熟的技巧。
二、详略得当,情真意切
在表达个人观点时,有的学生不知何时应详细叙述,何时应简明扼要;采用何种形式来表达个人的情感。
Through this action, we find we are more interested in English and our speaking English is better than before. It’s really a good way to learn English. I like it very much. And all the students and all the teachers are very happy. Only then did we realize the practice is so important in English learning.
整个段落读上去较为完善,但似乎无精彩之处,个人感触稍为平淡。试比较下面经过该写的段落。
As everyone knows, practice makes perfect. As a result of this activity, we become more interested in English and our speaking ability has greatly improved. I think it’s an effective way to learn English so I enjoy it very much and I hope we can have another English Week next semester.
该段落无论在结构方面或情感方面都略胜一筹。首先用谚语开头,引人入胜。接着用greatly,和effective以及enjoy等词肯定了活动的积极作用。
三、阐明深刻、言之有物
一些学生在阐述自己的观点时往往不注意论述的层次性,所叙内容肤浅,往往给人以概括不全的感觉。如:
In my opinion, I will do more reading, taking some exercise and taking part in some activities in the summer vacation. I think, it will help me a lot.
该段落仅仅叙述了作者在暑假欲做的事和参加的活动。其具体内容较为笼统,结尾仓促,给人言之无物之感。
As for me, I’ve never spent a more meaningful summer vacation. In this vacation every day I will spend hours going over my lessons. I will arrange some time to relax and enjoy hobbies. I will go swimming, watching some programs on TV, doing more reading and chatting with my close friends. In addition, I will participate in community work and this will raise my awareness of public service. In short, I will benefit a lot from them this vacation.
在该段落中作者将个人的暑假活动安排得井井有然。从学习到娱乐,再到参加社会活动,并将个人感受付于言中,给人以言之有理、阐述深刻之感。另外两个过渡性词语In addition和In short对整个段落也作了良好的衔接,与主题内容一脉相承。
四、评价中肯,表达委婉,
有些文章的结尾之出常常涉及到根据某个具体的事例提出一些建议或指点。许多学生常常喜欢使用You should …,We must… 这样的结构加以阐述。殊不知频繁地使用这样的形式会给人以厌倦的感觉,如果在写作时使用其他的形式加以表达,也许会使语气变得稍微委婉,使人更易于接受。
Personally, we shouldn’t pay more attention to it because high marks don’t mean high competence. Only by working harder and can they make greater progress in the future.
该段落主要是针对如何关注高考状元这一话题而有感而发。作者在论述个人观点时话语较为生硬,尽管无语法错误,但读后使人难以接受。
In my opinion, it is all right to give a certain amount of attention, but not too much. After all, exam scores are not symbol of success in modern society. Only buy working hard and making great efforts can a person achieve his dream in the future.
该段落所表达的内容上面的段落相比较,无论在遣词造句或表达手法上都胜出一筹。用give a certain amount of attention, 这一模糊表现法体现了委婉语使用的手法,用but not too much.降格陈述使语气又大为婉转,加之After all过渡性词语的使用,更是柳暗花明又一村,将其委婉之情的表达和盘托出,显示了高超的技巧。另外文中的symbol of success,making great efforts,achieve his dream几个短语的使用将个人的中肯评价体现在字里行间。