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李思豪
Dear Linda,
I am glad to hear that you will join in the exchange visit. Welcome to Shenzhen. Shenzhen is a beautiful modern city. But first, I’d like to tell you what you are going to do during the exchange and give you some advice.
During the visit, you will stay in the host family. They are really friendly. You should also respect them and be friendly to them. From Monday to Friday, you’ll study in a local school. Don’t be shy to communicate with other students. I believe you can make new friends there. On weekends, you’ll tour around Shenzhen and visit places of interest with your host family. I’m sure you will have fun.
Hope you have a happy exchange visit!
Sincerely,
James
傅红老师点评：本文脉络清晰有条理。使用But first巧妙转入主题，简明扼要。此外，文中很好的运用了I’d like to...,during...,You should also..., from... to ..., on weekend等词或句子，将文章内容要点有机地结合在一起。在句式应用上注意到了长短句交替使用，读起来朗朗上口，有韵味。个性发挥适当，结尾干净利落。是一篇好习作。
佳句欣赏：
1） I’d like to tell you what you are going to do during the exchange.
2） Don’t be shy to communicate with other students.
3） On weekends, you’ll tour around Shenzhen and visit places of interest with your host family.
范文：
Dear Linda,
I am glad to hear that you will join in the exchange visit. Welcome to Shenzhen. Shenzhen is a modern city with beautiful scenery and a developed educational system. I am sure you will learn a lot and enjoy your tour here.
Before you come, I have some advice for you to follow: First, respect your host family. And you’d better learn some simple Chinese greetings before you come. Second, be friendly to your classmates and teachers. Feel free to communicate with them. It is the best way to learn and practice Chinese. What’s more, Shenzhen is a tour city with a lot of attractions, such as, the book city, Shenzhen Grand Theater and Happy Valley. You can learn the culture by visiting those places. All in all, I hope my suggestions are helpful and welcome to Shenzhen.
Sincerely,
James
Dear Linda,
I am glad to hear that you will join in the exchange visit. Welcome to Shenzhen. Shenzhen is a beautiful modern city. But first, I’d like to tell you what you are going to do during the exchange and give you some advice.
During the visit, you will stay in the host family. They are really friendly. You should also respect them and be friendly to them. From Monday to Friday, you’ll study in a local school. Don’t be shy to communicate with other students. I believe you can make new friends there. On weekends, you’ll tour around Shenzhen and visit places of interest with your host family. I’m sure you will have fun.
Hope you have a happy exchange visit!
Sincerely,
James
傅红老师点评：本文脉络清晰有条理。使用But first巧妙转入主题，简明扼要。此外，文中很好的运用了I’d like to...,during...,You should also..., from... to ..., on weekend等词或句子，将文章内容要点有机地结合在一起。在句式应用上注意到了长短句交替使用，读起来朗朗上口，有韵味。个性发挥适当，结尾干净利落。是一篇好习作。
佳句欣赏：
1） I’d like to tell you what you are going to do during the exchange.
2） Don’t be shy to communicate with other students.
3） On weekends, you’ll tour around Shenzhen and visit places of interest with your host family.
范文：
Dear Linda,
I am glad to hear that you will join in the exchange visit. Welcome to Shenzhen. Shenzhen is a modern city with beautiful scenery and a developed educational system. I am sure you will learn a lot and enjoy your tour here.
Before you come, I have some advice for you to follow: First, respect your host family. And you’d better learn some simple Chinese greetings before you come. Second, be friendly to your classmates and teachers. Feel free to communicate with them. It is the best way to learn and practice Chinese. What’s more, Shenzhen is a tour city with a lot of attractions, such as, the book city, Shenzhen Grand Theater and Happy Valley. You can learn the culture by visiting those places. All in all, I hope my suggestions are helpful and welcome to Shenzhen.
Sincerely,
James